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The truth about forever
Is that there is no truth at all
It was just a turn-a-phrase
That left me so enthralled

The truth is truly nothing but
A fictional fantasy one must learn
To believe in quixotic theories that
Like love, one must begin to yearn

For without that love there is no hope
And without aspiration one cannot thrive
Without an emotion so ardent and pure
I find it so difficult to feel alive

Its sad but true, this lesson Ive learned
About losing someone so close
Someone who said hed be with me forever
Someone in whom I was so engrossed

The truth about forever
Is but a mere dream in my head
And all the longing I felt for you
Has left me hanging by a thread.
I've lost all the truth in my life so rather than forever, all I have is never.
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! This is just to let you know that I have used your title in my poem life, love, and all that jazz. :)
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TheOnlyWeirdo Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011  Student Writer
And there in-lays the lie, for if there is no truth then how does one know that to be truth. Truth must exist for to even say that truth doesn't exsist proves that there is something that you hold to be true.
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angelwbrokenwings Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009
Very sad, but so beautifully expressed. Wow!
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009
Thanks =)
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CaesarAlexander Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful use of simple yet powerful wording. Great rhythm to the structure. Very compelling. Great job. :)
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
Thank you =)
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shadowgriffen Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2009
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no comment
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animay0 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
"The truth about forever
Is that there is no truth at all"

Is that true?

Whatever you want to believe, there is and has to be truth.
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008
I just mean there is no truth in the word "forever"
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bloodwitness Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2007   Writer
I would recommend "That left me [too] enthralled" in stanza 1, line 4, as "so" is used incorrectly, but that aside it's quite good.
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mikepattonfan1 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007
Wow
Thats How I Feel too.
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grisom Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2007
Beautiful. As always Ash, absolutely gorgeous. <33
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2007
I love you. :glomp:
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Maetoile Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2007   Writer
This is like a Cherry Orchard in full bloom...x
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:iconbloodwitness:
bloodwitness Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2007   Writer
Haha, must you compare everything to that play?
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2007
Thank you
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livingcomforteagle Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2007
beautiful.

bittersweet all the way through.
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2007
Thank you :D
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:iconwakeyjakeyeggsnbakey:
beautiful but sad...the first stanza is amazing
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2007
Thank you darling.
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LilithLairPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2007
Love the words you placed with this poem. A long journey indeed, that may never see the end. Beautiful poem, thanks for sharing!
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ash4love Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
You are very welcome! Thank you for taking the time to read it! :glomp:

And as a side note, I must say that I love your avatar. Me hearts the panda :D
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LilithLairPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2007
No problem, glad you liked ze panda, Mr. Fuzz
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2007  Professional Writer
i'm awestruck and deeply moved :hug:
rather than forever, all I have is never..... :cuddle:
:heart:
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2007
Its sad but true.
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SapphireHaze Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2007  Student
The ending made me cry, you rock :heart:
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ash4love Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2007
Sorry to make you cry, but thanks for the compliment :hug:!! <3
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SapphireHaze Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2007  Student
Haha no problem :heart:
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xfaith-in-youx Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2007
Just reading the first line, captured me already "The truth about forever
Is that there is no truth at all". Gosh, I have to fav this.It's amazing work.. So pure!
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ash4love Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2007
Thank you so much!! :hug: You are much too kind.
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xfaith-in-youx Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2007
you are most welcome ^^
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EvilNNasty129 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007
really great job
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ash4love Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007
Thanks!
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fireflyskys Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this. The rhyming is wonderful and I love your choice of words. Most of my poems sound like the rhyming is forced and then it ruins the poem.
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ash4love Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007
Alot of mine sound forced, but this as well as Bittersweet Requium were so emotional that the words just came out and I didn't think of it.

Thank you so much for your kind words and the favorite!
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fireflyskys Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this. The rhyming is wonderful and I love your choice of words. Most of my poems sound like the rhyming is forced and then it ruins the poem.
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lil-kel Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007
Fab peice well done
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007
Thanks a ton!
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cryingpain Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2007
:( So sad. Its well written and flows well.
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2007
Thanks a ton!
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Beast57 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2007
Very beautiful I love it FAV!
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2007
:D Thank you so much!! :hug:
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Beast57 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2007
Your welcome! :hug:
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laura-beth467 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2007
this is really good, i like the revealing 'truths' about life in it!
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ash4love Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2007
Shank ya very very much!!
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krijt Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
A good choice of words. Long, big, difficult, while still keeping it understandable.
The rhythm is fine too, it flows along nicely.
The rhyming, what can I say, it's fabulous. I like how in the 1st and 4th stanza, the words sound similiar, but don't rhyme exactly.

All in all, you did a great job on this poem. It has a lot of emotion in it, and technically, it's very well put together too. I can't wait to read some more of your poetry. :)
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ash4love Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2007
Thank you so much. I do enjoy this poem, but due to it's truth, I cannot call it my favorite. I didn't try the 1st and 4th stanza thing...that's cool that it worked out that way though!
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krijt Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Which is your favorite then?

And you're welcome! :D
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:iconash4love:
ash4love Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2007
Hmm....for poetry, I believe it's "10 Things I Miss About You" written shortly after the man this poem is about left for boot camp.
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mycheshirecat Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2007
Kudos on your rhyming- you've used some difficult words and still managed to keep a decent rhythm.
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