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Goodbye Mom

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For years and years now
I've prayed for this day to come
The day I'd walk out the door
When I'll no longer have to succumb
I'm off to become a woman
Brave and strong just like you
Different only from your flaws
You won't need to help me through
I'll go far away from here
Finding bigger and better things
I'll be just like a little bird
Fluttering away on her little wings
But now that this day is here
I'm not so sure I'm ready to leave
And the look in your eyes tells me
You will soon be ready to grieve
It's hard to imagine all this time
This time I've yearned to break away
I'd relinquish my newfound freedoms
Wishing only that I could stay
But, Mom, I'll make this promise tonight
It doesn't matter how far I go
I'll remember all you gave to me
Even if those years passed long ago
I'll live my life to its full potential
Mom, I'll never disappoint you again
And this relationship we have started
I promise it will never end.
This is written for my mom and how I'm sure we both feel about my departure in 11 days. Gosh, how can it have been over 18 years already?
© 2007 - 2024 ash4love
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Resamori's avatar
Beautiful, I like most of the poem but I am just a bit wondering about the poem's end:

"Mom, I'll never disappoint you again", that would I interpret like you are gonna live your life for your mother, exactly what you tried to avoid in getting independent, or am I totally wrong?

And how can you promise that a relationship is never going to end when you are only responsible for one half of any relationship?

Are there any changes you would make to the text now 4 years later? Sorry for my curiosity and the critique...